12 Mart 2009 Perşembe

three things to change

I am a student of Middle East Technical University my department is foreign language education. Like everybody, I have some opinions about my department. If I had a chance to change my department, I would change the classes and the canteen, found a pc room.
I don’t really love our classrooms. They have all technical equipment
like computer and smart board. But there is nothing to make students more comfortable. For example, our chairs are uncomfortable and they are too small to put our books and bags. We even can’t write on it because of space problem. Moreover there is no clothes hanger in many classrooms. We have a lot of difficulty because of this problem. So the class environment is not suitable for us to concentrate on lessons.
There is no pc room in our department. We have a lot of things to do with computers. When we have an emergent need to computer, there is no pc room to use. So I want to ask where we will do our homework and registration. And there is a lot more things to do except for these. So I want a pc room to our department and I strongly believe that it is a real need.
I have a lot of complaints about our canteen. The chairs there is not comfortable, there is no television. The music there is bad and the canteen is so small that people sit very close to each other. The most important one, I think I and my friends will agree about that issue, is that the meals and beverages there is too expensive to be bought by a student. So we can’t eat well in lunch times. This fact affects our performance during lessons. Changing these conditions is crucial for the sake of students.
If problems are solved, all students will be a lot more enthusiastic to come to school. I wish all our problems about classrooms, pc room and canteen would be solved. I also want all students in our country and around the world has no problems with their schools.

3 yorum:

  1. Hi Şerife,
    I think your essey is very good. Your thesis statement is short and clear. And your topic sentences are support your thesis statemen. And also they are related to each other. When I look at your subject I see it shows our problems very well. We really have these problems, I hope some solutions will be done in soon.

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  2. I also think that your introduction paragraph and thesis statement are okey.Sentences are relevant to each other.Maybe you should put some expressions like first,second etc. at the beggining of body paragraphs.Conclusion is okey.It paraphrase the thesis statement.The three things you suggest to change are great ones.I hope they will change before we graduate...:)

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  3. I expected to see the transitions between the paragraphs. If you make connections between the paragraphs, that would be better. Finally, please be careful about your English.

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